Tuesday, May 3, 2011
Them.
I remember how late it was that Saturday evening when the storm first hit. I imagined myself outside the car I was sitting in. I felt so trapped. I wanted to leave my car behind and walk alongside the dark, narrow highway in front of me but I couldn’t. I knew why I was trapped. It began to rain so I decided to stay inside my car; there was no other option for me leaving anyways. I closed my eyes and listened to the melodic, solid rhythmic beats of each raindrop against my windows. I pictured all the problems, insecurities and losses I encountered these past few days. So many people are missing now; it’s all my fault. I don’t have much time now to decide how I’m going to get off this highway. If I leave, they’ll get me. I if stay any longer-
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This is a really good start Ben, but i think i gets a little bit confusing. But if you purposly trying to confuse the reader, then by all means, write more of your story!
ReplyDeleteGreat, amazing, lovely job Benjamin Williams! I don't know what "Dee1107" is referring to. I believe that this story is AMAZING. I want to read more.
ReplyDeleteI think it might be because this hasn't really gotten much into the plot yet, but like Kennedy I'm a little confused too xD
ReplyDeleteBut it's got a nice description thing going right now; I especially like the sentence "I closed my eyes and listened to the melodic, solid rhythmic beats of each raindrop against my windows"
Keep going! I'm curious as to what I'll see :P